Narrative Sample Essay Writing Tasks

Essay Sample  "Why Not?" by Trulee Trying

1.    In what ways does the tone of this essay weaken this writer's narrative?  What specific word choices do you think need to be changed to create a more convincing narrative?

2.    How do the lack of transitions between paragraphs make this narrative difficult to follow?

3.    What would be a more effective transition phrase for the end of paragraph 3 or the beginning of paragraph?

4.    How would you more effectively conclude this essay?   

5.    How do the grammar errors reflect on the author's seriousness of purpose?